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jonah was a man made up of
salt and stone and pieces
of driftwood he found carved with
hearts and letters of teenage boys'
and girls' names.  he was
more than his chicken leg bones and
sagging skin, and the neighborhood
kids thought he was the
ghost of ol' samson, but he was just
ninety-eight and pushing it.

jonah was a man who liked
to wear his mother's curtains as clothes
and used moth-eaten tablecloths
as blankets during the chilly nights.

he had this kind of gleam in his
old, dull gray eyes.  he thought he'd
build himself a boat and
set it on the ocean and maybe he would
find someone out there.
jonah didn't quite know who he was, yet.
the neighborhood wives that
brought him home-cooked dishes in big
pans to eat always told him
that he was no longer sane.

but jonah said that sometimes
sanity had less to do with the mind and
more to do with the people.
and on a warm tuesday,
he draped his mother's old tablecloth
around his shoulders and 
bundled up in a curtain, left his waterlogged
shoes on the beach, and set sail.

they found jonah's body
washed up on a bed of rocks, the stark white
of the hole-covered tablecloth bloody
jonah was a savior,

it's really rare that i ever use names in my poems, but here you go.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014
That first verse is pure brilliance. A strong opening that sets up the rest of the poem wonderfully.
I like the fairytale feel to this, the way you piece to together Jonah as a man of mystery and one who will live in legend and will be missed.

I think you have a knack for this kind of writing.
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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cmcpress Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014
Amazing use of imagery.  Like this a lot.
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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MatieuCanadaWilliams Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Should I comment on each piece? I suppose so. I love this one - I've read it over a good few times since you posted it. It flows so well.
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
well every piece you comment on i'll take into consideration!  :heart:

thank you!
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MatieuCanadaWilliams Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course! Thank you for being so wonderful blue heart bullet 
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Writer
Absalotely stunning, as always.This seems to be more of a short story then poem(though all poems have a story), which feels a bit refreshing. You really managed to paint a portrait here.
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much.
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Writer
No problem :)
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