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god gave her a glass of apple
flavored whiskey, sat her down and said
"honey,
i promise i will never let another hurricane
drown you"
and she sipped from her glass and left
lipstick marks on the rim
the lace of her bra was peeking out from the
back of her dress and he wanted to reach out and
caress her skin more than he
had ever dreamed of

the next year florida was hit with two hurricanes
back to back and
she was buried along with her best friend
in a little black dress and no undergarments because
(who is ever gonna look)
god thanked the undertaker

this one is for the kids who
don't feel safe in
their own bodies
i'm not sure if taking that last stanza out would help the piece or hurt it because i'm not sure if people will understand the poem much without it.

help me out guys
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songsforever Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
maybe a character who feels a storm of emotions??

I like this one a lot hun. Well done and keep up the good work. :hug:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ah, not quite, but i like your interpretation.

thank you!
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songsforever Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: you're welcome.
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Unnerving, this is.  Well done.  :)
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
NP- beautiful work. 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I would keep the last stanza. It takes your poem from metaphorical to real, if that makes sense. This is just so wonderful. :heart:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh, so lovely. congrats on the feature in that journal :) it's really well deserved.
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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