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i.
her stomach hollows out sometimes,
but you never hear it cry out in the sort
of desperate plea that you think
she does.
her body ain't a kingdom and her heart sure
ain't an oasis, but she's got
the body of an hourglass (not that she knows how
to tell her own time.)

ii.
the bathroom door is always
locked when you get home, and she never fails
to keep her secrets just
as tucked away in her bosom as she does you
away from her misery.
she never lets you buy her clothes
because it seems that she never ever wears her
own anymore.
all they do is swallow her up in a pitied
attempt to kill her off.
besides, your pockets are heavier
when she doesn't weigh so much.

iii.
her voice is so soft now.
she never speaks--too afraid to start a war from
simple words.
you like her better than your ex who
spit fire and brimstone at you, and never once would
shut up while you fucked
her into seeing white.

iv.
her daddy was always a rich man,
which is why she's got magazines of pretty girls--
not her--strewn all over
your bathroom floor.  which is
okay with you because
sometimes you picture yourself
marrying this girl, and when you do,
money is always a simple answer.

v.
but the girl's got
just as many daddy issues as any other
crazy girl you dated.
you're pretty damn sure that when her mouth's
pouring over your cock, tongue
like a hurricane, that she's thinking of
her daddy.  maybe even while
she's riding against you, with nothing but the sound
of slapping skin in the air,
she's thinking of how goddamn much she
wishes that
you wouldn't touch her ever again.

and you love it.
EDIT: I GOT A DD THANK YOU SO MUCH :heart::heart:

i read a highly disturbing article today that inspired this.  you can find it here: www.returnofkings.com/21313/5-…

the blog it's on, return of kings, is disgusting.  i hate this world.
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Given 2014-09-24
5 reasons to date a girl with an eating disorder by A-Lovely-Anxiety is a blunt, sarcastic criticism of a decidedly unmanly viewpoint; deft imagery and unflinching honesty give this piece wings. ( Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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Dry-Boones Featured By Owner Edited Sep 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay but this is sereously good writen.
But there is one question.

I don't know why people keep bitchin' about some females. There is no perfect female. right?
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
there will never be a perfect person.
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:iconshmeestick:
ShmeeStick Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
This is extremely well written
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconimpossible-fox:
impossible-fox Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I read the poem and then read the article.
It made me sick that people think like that.
There's someone with a genuine mental issue, and all those pervs can only think of sex.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
exactly the point
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:iconmaggotofdeath666:
maggotofdeath666 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
Seriously dude. Seriously? Are you this twisted or are you that big of an asshole.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it's sarcasm, dear.
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:iconbrotherhood-paladin:
Brotherhood-Paladin Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
Read the description please.
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:iconmaggotofdeath666:
maggotofdeath666 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
Read the article, and still gonna call you an asshole for writing it.
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:iconbrotherhood-paladin:
Brotherhood-Paladin Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
Facepalm  I didn't write the article, nor did Anxiety, this poem is telling us what the author of this article was really thinking in the article. The poem is telling us the author is a disgusting, selfish human being who doesn't deserve to have any girlfriend ever.
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:iconmomo-inky:
Momo-Inky Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
The point was to draw attention to the fact that this is an issue, not endorse it. It is a sarcastic criticism, as you can read in the Daily Deviation box if the description and this person didn't tip you off. Also, the person you responded to before isn't the creator, didn't write it.
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:iconcrazycool124:
crazycool124 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
Ok guys I just wanted to point out that you shouldn't go the returnofkings site. I read somewhere that the blog gets paid every time someone enters their site. I'm not 100% sure of that, but I don't want those assholes making any more money than they already are.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for letting me know
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:iconcrazycool124:
crazycool124 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
You're welcome. Congratulations on the DD by the way :)
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:icon4a-m:
4a-m Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014   Traditional Artist
Congratulations on the DD, and thanks for making me hate the world and everyone in it.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconnoxe-applepi:
Noxe-ApplePi Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student General Artist
Congratulations on the DD! :) Thank you for writing this; the way you piece words together is lovely :heart:
The author of that article is a shallow "insufferable turd who thinks the world revolves around [him]" (his own words). I am so disgusted to think that anyone would be so twisted as to not only use people's weaknesses for his own pleasure, but that they would even write an article encouraging it.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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:iconcharcherry:
CharCherry Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hot damn this was a great read.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconsthmtpkte:
sthmtpkte Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
You love someone for there personality, not because you get better things. Hell, If I met I guy like that and his lady looked miserable, I'd stick a boot up his ass. (I ain't one to swear, unless I say the truth)
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
exactly
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:iconsthmtpkte:
sthmtpkte Featured By Owner Edited Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
And a word to a Mr. Tuthmosis, the one who wrote the article:
"Screw you A-hole!"

And I would like to apologize to you Ms. A-Lovely-Anxiety, I thought these were your own words, I should've read the description first.
No offense right?
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:iconprettybirdie-is-vain:
Wow. I hate the article but love the poem, people who take advantage of these women should be banned from dating. M'just sayin'.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:icond-e-l-e-t-e-d:
d-e-l-e-t-e-d Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh God that article makes my blood boil over! I can't believe that there are people who actually think like that!

and if anybody ever tries to date me for the reasons in the article i will do something very unladylike to them.

Congratulations on the DD, love. This piece deserves to be in the spotlight, so that the issues behind the article can be talked about.
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Nevir-Saedi Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014
I agree with you that someone who thinks like the article is sick. That being said, I'm genuinely curious, do you acknowledge that there are women who think of men in just as shallow of terms? Does he have a fancy house, car, does he give me gifts, or even does he give me all the attention that I want but also never asks for any kind of affection when I'm not in the mood. And before you say it I'm not just talking sex there. But since I mentioned it while it's much more common for men there are women who are all about the sex and a guy's "hot bod."

It's a sick sad world and there are victims on both sides as well as perpetrators.
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:icond-e-l-e-t-e-d:
d-e-l-e-t-e-d Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I definitely don't deny that women do the same thing. I see it all the time.
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:iconnevir-saedi:
Nevir-Saedi Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2014
OK, happy to hear it. In my experience most people I see making comments like yours would deny that it goes the other way. Thanks for the response. :-)
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:icond-e-l-e-t-e-d:
d-e-l-e-t-e-d Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, no problem. :D
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so very much
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:icond-e-l-e-t-e-d:
d-e-l-e-t-e-d Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome. :heart:
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:iconticklemehoho:
TickleMeHoHo Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is hilariously messed-up...
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
isn't it though
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:iconticklemehoho:
TickleMeHoHo Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It is because I used to date a chick with an eating disorder... she used to eat everything we had. lol
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student Writer
I read this and I was like, I've read this before, why isn't it in my favorites?! I remedied that as quickly as possible.

Congratulations on the DD!
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Student Writer
You are very welcome!
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:iconde-vore:
De-Vore Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Jesus Christ that article.. thank you for writing this poem. I literally want to commit a violent crime against the very slime of filth that dared to write that.. atrocity.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, i agree
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:iconjazzy-jazzy-woo-woo:
Jazzy-Jazzy-Woo-Woo Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is... Wow, it's so horrible but I love it, it's scary because this is an actually thing in reality with real people and not just in a piece of art. You deserved that DD mon ami...
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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:iconjazzy-jazzy-woo-woo:
Jazzy-Jazzy-Woo-Woo Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
(/T-T)/ you're welcome, *huggles*
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GTAlchemist-13 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very harsh look, at a very harsh world. I just read an amazing article about Human trafficking--forcing someone into labor or sex acts against their will--is a $9.5 billion dollar industry in the USA alone.

Think link is below.

archive.today/2nqyi#selection-…
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:iconraze-two:
Raze-Two Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it is a psychological disorder, I hope no one was expecting anything good.
that doesn't change the fact that its bad at all, I'd just like to point it out.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
exactly
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:icongreyroseofhope:
GreyRoseOfHope Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...that's it, I give up on humanity.
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:icona-lovely-anxiety:
A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
same
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student General Artist
I saw this many months ago, and i must say, I'm as disgusted by it now as i was then.  I'm glad that you got the DD, because more people need to understand just how horrible it truly is, that some people actually have this view point.  
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